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    Registered User mr2oh3rd's Avatar
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    Default We are the Champions

    Check it

    CEF MR 2 Oh 3RD


    Ima Champion Like hoodies and sweaters Who Do it better//
    Rhymes is the Gun Bars is the clips the bullet is letters//
    mastermind masked behind Lines to challenge ya mind//
    so Challenging My Masterful Rhymes I'll be Cracking Ya spine//
    this bastard do dastardly deeds he love clapping his heat//
    but fuck wit or threaten my family im kidnapping your seeds//
    send you flick of they dead bodies u in denial u weak//
    saying to ya baby momma they just napping they sleep//
    run wit the B's we don't dap when we greet we peace//
    get high and play the backstreets wit the piece//
    ducking police..love a chick if she fucking for free//
    grab her butt we hump then bust something disgusting all over he weave//
    words u couldn't conceive ya mind isn't fertile like me//
    i give birth to words every time I Speak//
    9 times out 10 im unique some times i dumb it down//
    for the masses who rather crank the soulja boy now//
    you a soldier boy HOW? i never murked Nobody//
    But im good around murders Thats just my style//
    you coward bring to my hood u get devoured//
    within 2 hours you get robbed raped and Showered//
    wit enough fire power to knock down the sears tower//
    ha ha.... I luagh cuz you funny..My flow overpowers//
    All yall no ball no nuts 2 dollar sluts//
    who suck nuts like cluck cluck in jail Like So what//
    either this or get shanked I rather get stabbed wit 2 forks//
    then have my butthole sold for a fresh pack of newports//
    and they shorts....
    I only smoke 100s Been sick fuck if cancers is Commin im not runnin FUCK IT//


    "get me the cheddar stackin my bread up the hood had me fed up..//
    had to get lettuce my money my fetish//
    cash i got to get it debit or credit//
    give me the money or ya deaded ya head will get severed//
    mail ya body to the devil to hell i will send it//
    i only beat bitch -----s you could say i was sexist//"


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    Elite Producer Damnage's Avatar
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    Default Re: We are the Champions

    not bad...not great....but not bad...

    nothing REALLY stands out....

    but it is ok....keep at it

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    Default Re: We are the Champions

    this was a solid piece, i like the use of multiple rhymes in a bar, and it seemed to be cohesive the only thing it lacked for me was a metaphor to create a visual aspect, like I couldn't get into it completely, but with a nice beat, this could be a hot audio piece, good work

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    Registered User mr2oh3rd's Avatar
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    Default Re: We are the Champions

    thanks for the feed peoples...i was just playin wit this one feel me just a bunch of lyrical exersises you know tryin to get back at it i aint been writin much just chillin wit the children lol...


    "get me the cheddar stackin my bread up the hood had me fed up..//
    had to get lettuce my money my fetish//
    cash i got to get it debit or credit//
    give me the money or ya deaded ya head will get severed//
    mail ya body to the devil to hell i will send it//
    i only beat bitch -----s you could say i was sexist//"


    CHECK OUT THE MUSIC-WWW.MYSPACE.COM/YOUNGCEF203

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    Default Re: We are the Champions

    pretty much agree with the others...I'd like to hear this out though.
    Hottest part was the first 2 lines, how u broke the gun down like that

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