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    Vacant Frame – By Greg C (originalfragster)

    Empty below, the vast shoreline spreads.
    Not a soul, blankness litters the overcast scene with its dreary existence. Not even the lowliest of creatures roam this empty world.

    The colour has now since faded to a somber shade, its once bright and optimistic spirit, once evident in the bright colourful overtones of the scenery now bears nothing more than a darkened hue of neglect and abuse, from years of disregard and humble human carelessness.

    Stepping back, the scene remains just as flat and two dimensional as ever before. Any energy had left the scene a many a year ago, leaving the gentle swaying of the peaceful dune grass in such an intimidating stationary stance, such as the primitive war-dance of some menacing indigenous tribe.

    Even the ocean, seemingly immune to such notions has fallen victim to such distain. Gone are the clear blue tinges of pure carefree voyeurism. So gone too is the life from the seemingly immortal sky, its carefree nature obscured by the uncaring barricade of grey cloud.

    The absence of any significant sunlight lays evident upon the sinful shores of this unnamed landscape, any casual golden texturing of the usual fine golden sand has been forcefully stripped from every bare inch of its mutilated form, leaving behind its soulless remainants, for all the world to see, all the world in one picture frame.

    Standing further away from the scene, the picture frame, in all of its stagnant glory hangs crooked to one side, in a hesitant slump, devoid of any and all passion. So gone too is any detail of the masters brush, the fine lines of each individual hair of the brush from an anonymous artist remains loudly absent, depriving this lifeless relic of the past of any marked signs of previous life, instead leaving behind its familiar, ghostly bland texture.

    Not even the photo frame has been spared any less of a treatment than its less than picturesque contents. Small, naked chips expose themselves to the inquisitive public. Each scar, the product of years of punishment, before being hidden and obscured from prying eyes. The old photo frame bore no essence of life, the very wood it being composed of stood devoid of any life, of any essence of creation. Gone was the very soul of the majestic Kowhai tree the frame was derived from. Instead standing as a testimony to the harsh laws of the universe, of the sacredness of creation.

    Hesitantly, I simply shrug my shoulders and remove the old decrepit photo off its newly acquired roost. Gently, I reach for a sheet of newspaper, carefully wrapping the photo in newspaper, embalming it carefully within its own cocoon, until only god knows how long.

    Carefully I bury the wrapped photo back into the old, tattered cardboard box, itself an indication of the many hardships endured by the old painting. If only each crease and tear could utter a few words, the stories they could recollect and relay, in something more than words could ever spell.

    Seemingly out of nowhere, a shiver runs down my spine. Perhaps a last desperate cry from this sad painting to resurface from the depths of the dark prison of the attic, to return from its absence and reclaim its rightful place as the pride and joy of a grateful home, I would not know.

    Climbing up the creaky old attic stairs, I carefully carry this frame, a testimony to the times gone far by, before abandoning it within the dark reaches of the attic, the primorial soup of so many nightmares as a child. Hesitatingly, I begin the short, but draining trip down the stairwell. The few cracks of light bearing through the open attic stairwell slowly declined to nil as the heavy stairwell door slammed home with a distinct thud. And just like that, the past stayed buried for another generation to wonder upon...


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    MOTIVES AND REASONING:
    I wrote this in an hour. I have always liked the beach and the ocean, and I almost wrote a happy piece about the serenity of a summer sunset... Instead you get a depressing short story about a painting that no-one cares for. This story aims to discuss, or more accurately, raise the ideas concerned with every families dark secrets. The painting maybe old, but no-one cares to drag it down to discuss, its almost a taboo subject. Which is why i aimed to make the painting seem ghostly and detracted, using alot of negative language to drive this point home.

    As far as I know, I don’t have any dark secrets, so if you read this and began to wonder, then sorry, im pretty clean ;)

    Basically, all that blissful ignorance doesn’t make the photo go away, instead the secret remains locked and hidden in the minds of all (aka the attic) and just gathers dust with age. Time can make even the most horrific secrets become distorted and confused, as with the aging of the photo. I label the artist as a master, to drive the fact that this was indeed a major thing. Any rookie can paint an image, mum and dad say “nice dear” and throw it in the garbage the next day, but masters always thinks big, and those big things are impossible to throw away.

    Just think about it, and re-read the entire story.

    Regards,
    Greg C
    I also cleaned it up a little bit before submitting.

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    Default Re: Vacant Frame - First short story in a long time

    Very powerful and illustrative piece. You've got both talent and vision and I strongly encourage you to write more. As my friends from the bottom of the world say: goodonya, mate!

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    Default Re: Vacant Frame - First short story in a long time

    thanks for the feedback

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    Wow, it was very captivating and your vocabulary is extensive, great piece, strong descriptions! Nice work on turning a lifless object like a picture into a human and emotional subject for your piece, Nice work.
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    I agree with every1 else....verry good work. looking foward to future one's

    Stay up.

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    Default Re: Vacant Frame - First short story in a long time

    yea I think the vocab stood out to me the most... story was incredible... you got some maddd talent fammo...

    " Even the ocean, seemingly immune to such notions has fallen victim to such distain. Gone are the clear blue tinges of pure carefree voyeurism. So gone too is the life from the seemingly immortal sky, its carefree nature obscured by the uncaring barricade of grey cloud."

    ^^^favorite part

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