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    Livin the Atheist life Cesare Borgia's Avatar
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    Default Razorblade Serenade

    Mama, I'm getting restless, thinking bout that dark abyss
    Never thought id exist to care about the parts I missed
    Got this razor blade calling my wrists with it's serenade
    Like I'm holding a live grenade I don't want to evade
    And still I strive, drive and drive yet still I never arrive
    I don't think I want to be alive, I don't want to survive
    It's time to take a dive, please just promise I won't be revived
    Just hide my body so my loved ones don't know that I died
    I never would have tried had I knew just how many cried
    I couldn't hide the thoughts as I felt the razor blade slide
    The first bead of blood made me think before I proceed
    If I succeed ,what's the aftermath of this selfish deed?
    My body bleeds, a bloodbath, an obscene suicide scene
    A clean getaway, turned into my family's worst dream
    Mama, I think I had it wrong, you were right all along
    I think I wanna hold on and stay right where I belong

    [HOOK X2] Sometimes I feel like that I'm cancerous in others lives
    That's probably why I drink at night and sleep till 4 or 5
    It's kinda hard walking through life with my distorted eyes
    when I was younger, I was stupid and thought I thrived[HOOK X2]

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    Default Re: Razorblade Serenade

    Nice mad. Deep shit. yo Keep it up man!

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    Default Re: Razorblade Serenade

    Its good conceptually, and has some really good bits but overall it feels like it needs more polish to compare with your usual drops. Thats just the way it reads to me, hearing it could be an entirely different outcome.

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    Default Re: Razorblade Serenade

    Quote Originally Posted by PHAT-DUB View Post
    Its good conceptually, and has some really good bits but overall it feels like it needs more polish to compare with your usual drops. Thats just the way it reads to me, hearing it could be an entirely different outcome.
    I think your right, it was an impulse rhyme, I'm going to touch it up and add a couple verses soon, thanks for being honest.

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    Icon14 Re: Razorblade Serenade

    Quote Originally Posted by CESARE BORGIA View Post
    was an impulse rhyme,
    Yo Cesare, thatís what I felt was probably the deal,

    Quote Originally Posted by CESARE BORGIA View Post
    I'm going to touch it up and add a couple verses soon, thanks for being honest.
    cool, my thoughts is that more people in this world should be true in what they do and speak what they believe. Ideally people take criticisms constructively and build from them and things get smoother.-that right there is the only real progress.

    Peace,
    ~Tha Dub

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    Default Re: Razorblade Serenade

    ^^very true words

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    Default Re: Razorblade Serenade

    I kinda laughed at that part that says:
    The first bead of blood made me think before I proceed

    lol , son felt that pain and it hit a ngga wit that reality like this some ol' Bulls**t.

    But yeah, i thought it was good. Better than soulja boy.
    Pretty deep too, you definitely got some skill.

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