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    i thought of the first two lines listening to 2pac- hail mary, and the rest came out from there

    u claim that u a killer ur a bitch
    wana be a thug but aint nuthin but a snith
    im tellin u now blud this is far from fiction
    ima run up on u worse than heroin addiction
    ill destroy your life, leave a body lacking soul
    im a top striker u cant even score a goal
    u send em flyin at me i chuck em back with ease
    give me a challenge now mother fucker please
    this shit is too easy its just spillin from my dome
    just give up punk n take ur bitch ass home
    cos u see im fuckin fiesty
    ill leave u lookin icey
    if u try to fight me
    ill take your fuckin life G
    i spit bars that'll leave u sick like cancer
    ur a stray cat im a mother fuckin panther
    if u wana test me ud best keep up the pace?
    im quick like a cheater but im in a turtle race

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    Default Re: Random Lyrics

    I wouldnt call it good, but its not terrible either. U had a few hot ideas in there. Maybe work on bar complexity a little bit though. Keep it up though, the skills are gonna increase.

    (Thanks +1)

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    Default Re: Random Lyrics

    Quote Originally Posted by Mr Base Head View Post
    i thought of the first two lines listening to 2pac- hail mary, and the rest came out from there

    u claim that u a killer ur a bitch
    wana be a thug but aint nuthin but a snith
    im tellin u now blud this is far from fiction
    ima run up on u worse than heroin addiction
    ill destroy your life, leave a body lacking soul
    im a top striker u cant even score a goal
    u send em flyin at me i chuck em back with ease
    give me a challenge now mother fucker please
    this shit is too easy its just spillin from my dome
    just give up punk n take ur bitch ass home
    cos u see im fuckin fiesty
    ill leave u lookin icey
    if u try to fight me
    ill take your fuckin life G
    i spit bars that'll leave u sick like cancer
    ur a stray cat im a mother fuckin panther
    if u wana test me ud best keep up the pace?
    im quick like a cheater but im in a turtle race


    I see some potential here mixed with some pretty ordinary writing, like it clicks here and there but overall just never hits that spot, my advice would be to use a rhyming dictionary for a while to build up your word reserve, in turn your rhymes would be more original rather than common place.

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    ^i agree with Bastard Man, a rhyming dictionary would be yer best friend is this scenario. Keep up

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    Yea, you gotta work on your rhyme patterns homie. add some more depth to your lines.

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