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    Default One Man Dances (unfinished)

    One man dances, lands in ambulances//
    Politicians spent all the money, demand more taxes//
    Medicare is not cheap for the old and weak//
    Immigrants get ther first 7 years tax free//
    Drug dealers on border saying "we got crack, weed"//
    We'll ship it to porches for a fee, but addiction is free//
    What would make a politician unique//
    Is if he mane a difference under the conditions he speaks//
    These are just political views, cynical musings on the subject//
    Of abuse on the public in the name of the country//
    And shame on the hungry if they ask for money for lunch cuz//
    It takes you 30 second to make that dollar you're giving up//
    Money, can't get enough even if it means you//
    Make poverty stricken people drop to their knees, they can't eat food//
    But at least you, have your celebrity status intact cuz//
    Without that, you'd just have flat screens in a cadillac but//
    This is the habitat for breeding bad habits that//
    Makes me remember innocence and wish I could have it back//
    I'm juggling hardships, life is a balancing act//
    They hate that I'm asking questions, but they're things I have to ask//

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    Default Re: One Man Dances (unfinished)

    im feelin the topic at hand but some of the lines seem a little stretched and forced... the rhyme scheme is a little off but u make some valid points... i like it mayne keep droppin :thumbup:

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    Default Re: One Man Dances (unfinished)

    It's hard to follow the beat without the beat....I think if I rapped it it would all fit but yeah, I know what you're talking about. I read a lot of poetry/rhymes that don't seem like they would flow on a beat, but it comes down to how you rapped it...


    Anyway, this is some of my older stuff which I got a lot of so expect more...

    And thanks wunthugs for leaving a reply.

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