Results 1 to 4 of 4

Thread: My Heat- Chambray I Want Feedback

  1. #1

    Default My Heat- Chambray I Want Feedback

    yo these sneakers so smooth on my feet feels like i aint wearin nuhtin beneath my heat get off my level you cant get
    these for cheap but maybe if they beat i got some holey grail 11's yup they red n black fit em wit da raw denim levis yup
    yu'll see dem comin back you step on my j's ill step on yo face scuff on my leather dems is fightin word pul out my
    burner without any words.

  2. #2
    Black Wallstreet Distrbtr PDP's Avatar
    Join Date
    18 May 2006
    Location
    Westcoast Canada
    Age
    33
    Posts
    4,054

    Default Re: My Heat- Chambray I Want Feedback

    well homie, I cant follow your rhyme scheme, u need to put it in a bar format or at least lyric format,,, overall I aint that impressed, no wordplay, I aint impressed by your changeups of maybe if they beat I got some holey grail,,,, left me wondering what the hell you meant.

    No hate, just constructive criticism,,, u gotta come harder fam


    WANT BLACKWALLSTREET GEAR OR NJD GEAR, GO TO WWW.SCHELLSHOCKENT.COM TO GO TO MY STORE, I GOT THE OFFICIAL STORE, I AM THE ONLY OFFICIAL SELLER

    IF I COULD VOTE, I WOULD VOTE FOR BARACK OBAMA

  3. #3

    Default Re: My Heat- Chambray I Want Feedback

    thanks good lookin homie holey grail is some super rare shoes

  4. #4
    Livin the Atheist life Cesare Borgia's Avatar
    Join Date
    29 Nov 2004
    Location
    Westcoast USA
    Age
    33
    Posts
    5,930

    Default Re: My Heat- Chambray I Want Feedback

    Sorry homeboy, This is hard to read, lacks substance and the rhymes are far to generic for my taste, don't give up on rhyming, just practice and do your best to make it mean something, that materialistic style only appeals to teenage kids in the suburbs.

Similar Threads

  1. Am I The Only Heat Fan Around Here...?
    By JDub in forum Off Topic
    Replies: 17
    Last Post: 11-08-2008, 7:26 AM
  2. Replies: 2
    Last Post: 25-03-2006, 10:39 PM
  3. Summer Heat 2005 and Summer Heat 2005 Vol. 2 tracklistings
    By DJ. T in forum Music Promotion: Albums, Mixtapes, & Websites
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: 22-08-2005, 10:58 PM

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •  
About CrazyPellas

CrazyPellas is a great music community that was founded in 2004, for Artists, DJs and Producers to Upload Music, Share Music and Get Feedback on your Music. We are constantly striving to improve CrazyPellas and ask you to contact us if you have any suggestions or if their is anything that we can help you with.

Connect With Us