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    Default Fake Friendz (Picture Me In Your Dreams)

    This goes out to all those Fake Friendz (The Song Isn't Only Dedicated To Fake Friendz)

    Picture me in your dreams when you fall asleep
    always keep an eye open in case you miss a creek
    You should had remained silent you knew i had a bad side
    now your trapped in a situation that's there til u die
    Why? Cuz im a Fake Friend? yeah i said your a Fake Friend

    Smoking a blunt hallucination with your biitch
    pass my shiit all over the city until i get rich
    I'm on a no return ticket to paradise
    i heard its only all covered with flashing lights
    They say biitches approach you without asking permission
    the temptation just keeps an inexperienced man wishing
    Go ahead Lil Player there's no need to be shy
    your no less than a top player do what ya like
    Fcuk the others they only hating cuz your vicious
    they fall to ground just with a glance at your riches
    Make sure them phony motherfcukers keep to there side
    never trust a biitch whose only got money in mind
    Since when are top players ever messed about
    only a real player would know tha fcuk I'm talking bout
    You gotta respect women that's only if you know the difference
    a woman has respect for herself a bitch will dick ride in every sense

    Picture me in your dreams when you fall asleep
    always keep an eye open in case you miss a creek
    You should had remained silent you knew i had a bad side
    now your trapped in a situation that's there til u die
    Why? Cuz im a Fake Friend? yeah i said your a Fake Friend

    There's a god up above and he called on me to tell ya
    my fears have vanished knowing there's nothin to be scared of
    He told me there's men and women of all colours and races
    apparently heavens our savior and there's no room for racists
    Face it, if your a racist you better hurry and change
    rejected populations are a free ride towards hells range
    Riding round tha block with the vibration of my 808s
    jaws drop to see a top player active in his beloved game
    I sense danger, Pull on my glock hand on tha trigger
    always maintain eye contact you gotta be quicker
    Slap on a bulletproof vest keep an eye on the block
    there's no need for reinforcements we're used to hear shots
    It's almost second nature for us living in the ghettos
    governments and politicians kick us away with stilettos
    I cant take it anymore its like a nightmare that loops
    its a never ending life full of crime with no food

    Picture me in your dreams when you fall asleep
    always keep an eye open in case you miss a creek
    You should had remained silent you knew i had a bad side
    now your trapped in a situation that's there til u die
    Why? Cuz im a Fake Friend? yeah i said your a Fake Friend

    If there's a god above why cant he hear me reach me
    patrollin choppers up above trap my screaming
    Young kids try reject the violent behavior
    but they fall in the trap either sooner or later
    Is there a heaven for a killer or am i going 2 hell
    Let me live in these streets ain't no peace for me in jail

    (Have to finish the rest of the last verse)

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    Default Re: Fake Friendz (Picture Me In Your Dreams)

    alright man, I can feel some emotion in this piece you're expressing yerself well and i could almost start to vibe to it over a real slow beat with lots of anguish to it but the flow was a bit shaky at times and the vocab needs to be more complex, I'm not saying you gotta give us a vocab lesson just step up some words and try to avoid repeats of emotional words and nouns. obviously u cant avoid words like I, You, it. but for real, its a fairly respectable piece, keep up

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    Default Re: Fake Friendz (Picture Me In Your Dreams)

    ditto to the flow issues, but this has some serious potential. Be sure to repost when the last verse is finished.

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    Default Re: Fake Friendz (Picture Me In Your Dreams)

    Sry im commenting late on ya piece, Just got around to this part of tha site....
    I heard ya on Every thing you said...Especially that Hook Except i dont think that last line will fit
    for ya in a song, unless you have something for it like a 1 line bridge leading into erry verse or it could be 1 bar,,,I could have that wrong, But Its Hot Nonetheless....No hatin just tryin to tell ya from my limited Exp. Ya Feel Meh...Keep Ya Spirit and Guard ya soul Like you going to be Gods Torch Bearer...I know you Believe in God From Ya Rhymes... So Neva Lose Faith like i did...Im Getting Him Back So Pray 4 Meh...
    Choppaz

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    Default Re: Fake Friendz (Picture Me In Your Dreams)

    This was def a good piece. I didnt see a whole lot in the individual verses about fake friends though.

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