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    [intro talk]the underground great hi, im white[intro talk]

    the fact of the matter is too much chatter
    the latter of the clatter make shit splatter
    it being fake but im too baked
    hide behind lines but that just combines
    into somethin greater sooner or later
    you become the hater being a deflator
    im something like the creator but you wait for
    me im hotter than the equator so take one step back
    pipe wrack i am pitch black
    not the skin the motto
    grand theft auto im like lotto
    cuz its power, it is weaves hour
    the louder i get the more explicit i get
    lit by one bit of wit its hard to admit
    that sheer fear is steered into low gear
    i rhyme rhyme with pure time im
    not under rated cuz u have to be rated
    to be be under rated ive just been waited
    on, drawn to this like the great abyss
    too scared to spit this shit in front of crowd
    so i scream loud, proud of never being wowed
    i write rhymes in my notepad, man im so glad
    that im just a lad who aint got it that bad,
    why obama cause drama when babys mama...
    insert comma, my beat loops oh so boring
    youre either snoring or adoring
    but im storing my story with a lock and key
    so get to exploring if you want to find me

    i recorded it so my friend could listen and he thought it was official, if you think it doesnt flow it does


    feedback please

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    bro, it is clear to see that u have skill, u have a lot of multi rhymes and respect where its due, they do all fit, i do however feel that it could have done with some tightening on the longer lines. It was very short and snappy then u get the odd line that drags out a bit more. No hate tho homie, just my opinion. Keep up the good work

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    Actually man i just read through it again and i got it all to fit apart from the "insert comma, my beat loops oh so boring" line but i think that may just be the way im reading it.

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    Seemed like a Lil Wayne type verse. A lot of rhymes, but not a lot of sense. Don't just rhyme for the sake of rhyming.

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    it seems like you just picked random words and went through the process of finding out what they rhyme with, wrote a bunch of lines and threw them together. it flowed and all just no subject matter

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    made no sense

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    guess i gotta tell what it means

    fact of the matter is too much chatter (too much hatin)
    the latter of the clatter make shit splatter (most of it mean nothing)
    it being fake but im too baked (it goes with shit and meaning that haters are fake but fuck it im too baked to give a fuck)
    hide behind lines but that just combines into something greater (you hate on here you will eventually hate on everything)
    sooner or later you become the hater (self explanatory)
    being a deflator (you just hatin just to get at me)
    im something like the creator (im just a creator)
    im hotter than the equator (im a creator that is hot)
    but you take one step back (after hearing me you take one step back from hatin)
    pipe wrack i am pitch black not the skin the motto (my rhymes are of a typical black rapper but im white)
    grand theft auto, im like lotto cause its power (both have power of taking over peoples lives)
    it is weaves hour (to rise above what everyone else is doin)

    you get my drift..everything i say has a meaning..obviously you dont know me so you dont know what the fuck im talkin about..thanks for the input tho guys

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    guess i gotta tell what it means

    fact of the matter is too much chatter (too much hatin)
    the latter of the clatter make shit splatter (most of it mean nothing)
    it being fake but im too baked (it goes with shit and meaning that haters are fake but fuck it im too baked to give a fuck)
    hide behind lines but that just combines into something greater (you hate on here you will eventually hate on everything)
    sooner or later you become the hater (self explanatory)
    being a deflator (you just hatin just to get at me)
    im something like the creator (im just a creator)
    im hotter than the equator (im a creator that is hot)
    but you take one step back (after hearing me you take one step back from hatin)
    pipe wrack i am pitch black not the skin the motto (my rhymes are of a typical black rapper but im white)
    grand theft auto, im like lotto cause its power (both have power of taking over peoples lives)
    it is weaves hour (to rise above what everyone else is doin)

    you get my drift..everything i say has a meaning..obviously you dont know me so you dont know what the fuck im talkin about..thanks for the input tho guys

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    oh ya and the insert comma line has a pause because im white in the burbs i dont know shit bout the babys mama problems lol

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    theres a difference between meaning in lines and meaning within a verse, I'm not saying that this was whack or nothing, I'm simply saying that as a whole it was all over the place...like a freestyle.

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