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    Default Enigma - NINJA FLOW SON!!!

    <This might be my favorite written so far. Everybody likes ninjas right? Well me too, so here's my ancient technique...PEN-JITSU!!>



    *************CHORUS***************
    Its not a question
    Its not a riddle
    Its the enigma
    Ninja ngga
    **********************************


    Arissen from the midst of the mist, the enigma
    Never see it coming till I hit you with the stigma
    Master of the deadly arts and the techniques
    Move with the shadows, trained and skilled in mystique
    Sneak through your guarded.. fortress.. with silent stealth
    On my mission and im coming for your health
    Armed with the verse that you curse
    Immersed in the dojo style, I know no worse
    Utilize the first of my few smoke bombs
    Then eliminate the guards with a few hot bars
    Alarmed, you call for your paid strong arm
    But I swoop from the ceiling and break his strong arm
    As you Reach for the gat and act to cause harm
    I hit you with the beat just after the disarm
    so darn, nothing left to do but run
    But I throw my ninja bars, mission complete, im gone

    ********CHORUS************
    Its not a question
    Its not a riddle
    Its the enigma
    Ninja ngga
    **************************

    Never get a visual, always in peripheral
    and if I dont hit you physically then its sublimal
    You move too slow, this is not a gimmick
    Just When think you caught me, its my afterimage
    Gifted with swiftness, I move with agility
    ability to infiltrate your private facility
    A shadow in the night, a mysterious entity
    To even speak my name has a serious penalty
    The flow is sub-zero so I kill elementally
    Smoke you like scorpion, reveal the versatility
    Essentially, you'd have to pray to God for an intervene
    If not, then eventually you'll feel my potential B
    Theres a high possibility that my hostility
    Will leave you in the hospital seen with no identity
    The virility put your defenses in debility
    You fought endurently, but you cant escape the killin B


    ********CHORUS************
    Its not a question
    Its not a riddle
    Its the enigma
    Ninja ngga
    **************************

    1 pen in my hand, 4 more that are hidden
    So im ready to strike at any moment with a written
    Next time you blink you may never see again yo
    Life fades to black like the ending of Sopranos
    ..Black mask, black shirt and black pants
    ..Black man comin out Japan's black clan
    shrouded in mystery, little is known
    Anybody whos seen me is already gone
    I do not sleep, I wait with closed eyelids
    Never rest while im on a mission or assignment
    Gaiden is my dude and Im cool with the pirates
    My answers on youtube spread like a virus
    Train underground till its time move out
    The flow is cut-throat so you cant even shout
    Ive taken a solemn vow, dont ask how or when
    Your last memory will be me clicking my pen
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    Default Re: Enigma - NINJA FLOW SON!!!

    Ok, this drop has some good potential, but the most flagrant anomaly in its icey cool freshness is the following set of bars from the first verse:

    "Alarmed, you call for your paid strong arm
    But I swoop from the ceiling and break his strong arm
    As you Reach for the gat and act to cause harm
    I hit you with HIYAAAA after the disarm
    so darn, nothing left to do but run
    But I throw my ninja bars, mission complete, im gone"

    First off I really don't like the use of 'strong arm' twice as the ends to the two bars, yes I understand what you where going for and that these are two different references, but I don't think they are far enough apart to merit their usibilty in sequence-it just dosen't sound right IMHO. Then it gets cornier than an old 'z grade' kung-fu movie, with the next couple bars and I don't think that fits the overall scope of the spit here-not to mention that the last two bars don't even have any rhyme to em'. There are other bits and pieces through out this, that also need work, but I don't have the time to point them all out now, I'd suggest you rework the first part, and do an overall edit and tightening of the rest.
    Sorry if this sounds harsh, but I am trying to offer creative critism on this from my perspective and we all have different perspectives, shit thats what makes life so subjective,

    Peace, ~from Tha Dub

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    Default Re: Enigma - NINJA FLOW SON!!!

    interesting, but thnx a lot though.
    ill tighten it up when i get the chance.

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    Default Re: Enigma - NINJA FLOW SON!!!

    yea...it is pretty dope, you got some origianal ideas, but some tightening would work nice....but hey, if spit right to a hot beat, it'd sound dope

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