I got to reading this today and the 3rd verse seemed to weak so i rewrote it as an alternate version, what i need is opinions on what one you guys like the best.

Now let me tell you bout this woman i adore
Be sure, 2 much of her your coming back 4 more
She's hardcore, causing me to be a maniac
The fact is, she's influencing the way i act
I react in kind knowing that she's always mine
A certain knack for being there at the right time
Ask how deep i care, with you i can always sleep
So unique as a pair cause you got that mystique
Not a peep baby, cause you know your my lady
Much love, even if you are a little shady
Pop off your top and now im begging not to stop
I know you want me and you know your all i got
I bring you to my lips and drink deep from your kiss
I feel the heat and a growing sense of wellness
The bliss i feel from leaving you completely drained
Helped to keep me sane when i split from Mary Jane


I get a taste, from then on its about the chase
My friends say it's a waste because your just a case
And so i pace myself, she was twenty two and tall
Say my name and i answer every time you call
After all, ive known her since i was a juvenile
So many styles that i long to walk the isle
While sometimes you make me sick, i try not to trip
Blurry eyed, i say ill leave but i don't mean it
It's like she's got this grip that keeps pulling me back
Flaunting her inviting rack, cutting me no slack
Now my heads spinning thinking about this weekend
Come meet my friends, pass out then do it all again
It aint healthy but you love me poor or wealthy
Regardless, i ignore everything they tell me
Though forty, you were never really above me
Can somebody tell me, does she really love me?

Dear Miss Tanqueray, maybe we should make the break
I shake at the thought but I've had all I can take
She raised the stakes and left me nothing in her wake
Is it to late to break the habit she creates?
How can I illustrate the good times without the bad?
This fate I designed got me resigned and living sad
I had no clue you could do the things you do
And who would of thought id come running back to you?
It was so plain that I never seen your mind games
And still I find myself struggling to refrain
Where do I place the blame? A fatal attraction
Remember he catching my eye and my reaction
No traction, head on in her grip and now I'm gone
Through the intersection, till then it never dawned
Spawned a head on scene complete with broken bodies
A whole family gone before I knew she got me.


[ORIGINAL 3rd VERSE BELOW]

They say your no good for me and i just cant see
Even though its destroying my whole family
I still need you daily even if i want free
How could i break away if i need you every day?
One way or the other, you know id never stray
Dear ms Tanqueray, maybe we should make the break
I shake at the thought, but I've had all i can take
It was so plain that i never seen your mind games
And still i find myself struggling to refrain
Where do i place the blame? a fatal attraction
Remember her catching my eye and my reaction
No traction, head on in her grip and now im gone
Through the intersection into a closed casket
They never seen it, it was just a blip
A whole city touched from just one relationship
Took a tragedy to see she that she dont love me