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    Default St.Louis State of Mind

    Wrote this a couple days ago, and decided to record it. Here's The Lyrics:

    I bring the destruction of hoes and foes
    Rob Em for they jewlery then steal they clothes
    To much stress for one foe/ Givin me migranes from the start
    I try to relax but the beat/ of the track is like my heart, It Skips
    2 Beats Reinact while it tries to be smart
    Im gettin stuck in a whole/ 6 feet deep up in the dark
    So What You Want/ with the realness of the heat
    I got some Remi in me -----/ I shoot You Die and weap
    Youre Weak/ Crying when yo friends die in the streets
    I been dying from depression/ but nobody cryin for me
    I been growin mad/ So I been stickin with the rod
    Gold Oil and Drugs/ No one thought I could be GOD
    Now you listenin to the/ leader of the Illuminati
    Takin ova hoods/ while you dead and gone
    (Whats Wrong)/ I been caged up for too long
    All you little rappers are trash like old thongs
    Tired and Sick of this bullshit
    Smack You across ya face until you drool spit
    St.Louis State of Mind/ High Number of Crimes
    1(Gunshot) Now you in a tux/ in front of a line
    I Shot Ya/ What You Gon Do
    Rob the lil money that you had in yo shoes
    Handcuffed Yo Mom and Dad to they feet
    Im Delusional -----/ Machete across Ya cheek
    Im not Pacino/ Fuck The Money, Power, And Fame
    Im tired of bad luck/ Im tryin to get out the rain
    Shoutouts to all the rappers up in the game
    You Lyrically been shot in the middle of your brain

    What Ya Think? I need some feedback?


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    Default Re: St.Louis State of Mind

    well its just a accapella, i feel you didnt really do good mainstainin your flow and the adlibs were way too loud, lyrics sounded too much like biggie like your tryin to immitate him i wasnt really feelin it man
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    Default Re: St.Louis State of Mind

    I aint trippin but how am i immitating biggie. those was jus the emotions i was feeling at the time when i was writing that song. and i dont even see a similiarties between wat i wrote and somethin he done. i know the mixing is horrible, i jus wanted to know how the lyrics, cuz i kno i need to work on my flow.
    Last edited by kingjj4; 29-03-2009 at 5:32 AM.


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    Default Re: St.Louis State of Mind

    You Gotta Relax and or breathe...you can't sound like you're reading...
    the flow you're looking 4 this is like your trying to get it off your chest....
    you did good in some parts getting ya emotions across which is why i hear you
    on that biggie comment above^.....i guess its just the who shot ya words
    try mixing this with a hype/dark and edgy type of beat...i think it would really bring it out
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