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    Default My first official track

    SoundClick song info: I did you wrong remix by michael hoang - That young 13 year old that gon start a dynasty when he gets older.Rite now juss makin beats(that suck but who gives a shit) and remixes/blends that r pretty gude.later ima record
    Mims feat Michael Angelo(me)- I did you wrong

    I did you wrong, I admit I did
    I did you wrong, I admit I did
    But I, I'm facing the rest of my life alone
    I did you-I did you wrong-wrong
    Ohh wrong-wrong
    I did you wrong-wrong
    Ohh wrong-wrong (I know)
    I did, I did you wrong-wrong (Mims)
    Ohh wrong-wrong (Push Play)
    But I-I-I-
    (There's some shit I gotta get off my chest
    Shame on me, listen, how we gonna do this y'all)

    I hit it once right after I dissed her
    Then after that tried rap to a sister
    Same day, I had her ass in the bed y'all
    Same day and she giving me head y'all
    I don't lie, I'm a player for real
    I learn the game, so I'm playing the field
    I tell the truth, I don't fill her with lies
    They feel on my hair, I feel on thier thighs
    It's a tradeoff baby, it ain't a surprise
    You call me a 4, she call me a 5
    That's 30 to skeet, and 30 to slide
    And according to me it's plenty of time, so

    I don't know what you tripping for
    We done went through this shit before
    A few women ain't going to like this song
    So I apologize now cuz

    1- I did you, I did you wrong-wrong (I know I did you wrong)
    Ohh wrong-wrong (That's why I wrote this song)
    I did you wrong-wrong (I know I did you wrong)
    Ohh wrong-wrong (That's why I wrote this song)
    I did you, I did you wrong-wrong (I know I did you wrong)
    Ohh wrong-wrong (That's why I wrote this song)
    I, I, I did you wrong (But I aint' done yet, listen)
    Michael
    its my turn mims
    this song dont mean nothin
    my names not usher
    but this is my confessions
    teresa
    i have to admit
    u were one of the best of them
    a realli cool one
    a year 7 months
    i musta did somethin wrong
    thats y i wrote this song
    and linda nvm.
    got nothin to say to u
    i alreadi feel bad enuf
    for all that bullshit and stuff
    liza.
    y tha fuck did we do wat we did
    wen we bareli met
    but u did'nt wana kno me
    u juss wanted to make out i bet
    but i dont blame u
    i heard im quite tha charmer
    and u can bet
    i never tried to harm ha
    katryna
    we did'nt even go out
    but u still trippin
    sayin i get lots of gurls
    implyin that im pimpin
    but u kno i get it so wet
    that u culde feel it drippin



    Repeat 1

    It was Keisha, Pam, Tina and Stace
    Mary, Kay, Elena and Faith
    Sheena from 8th, Talia, Tamia
    Shia, Tia, Juanita, Rasheeda
    Beth, Tisha, Ruby, Judy
    Oh, fuck her, she never gave me no booty
    I kicked her out, sent her back to her crib
    Cuz she was running her mouth about me eating her coochie
    Let's not forget about Michelle
    She tried to max out my cards like Blue Cantrell
    Some 'Hit 'Em Up Styles' shit
    She was my down bitch
    Until she heard I was fucking some out of town bitch

    I don't know what you tripping for
    We done went through this shit before
    A few women ain't going to like this song
    So I apologize now cuz

    Repeat 1 to fade

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    WOW!! are you serious this is you?!

    this is fucking sick im feeling this da shit is hot who is da first dude?! he ripped dat shit was dat you?? he had me feelin it

    da second dude is all off beat need to slow down and formulate da bars better your not sayin nothin...this shit is hot but honestly da second dude jus fucked it up da beat is fuckin sick...second dude turn ya vocals up and spit harder wit more meanin behind ya bars

    third dude he is funny flow is nice i like his voice he ridin da beat im lovin how he throwin da shorties names in it da shit is blazen da second dude need to work on his shit a lot to compair wit tha 2 dudes he was jus rhymin wit he brung down a perfect song..peace

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    first dude was mims, second dude was mh, which now i under stand the MH stands for your name, honestly son you need ta work on alot of things, couldnt hardly understand you and you vocals was way low and kinda off beat, keep workin on it tho homey, stay up. anyway yeah it was kinda bad, but you gotta keep tryin
    "come sit, sip from my holey water/ fresh dripped, from the veins of the innocents ive had to slaughter/ imagine the voice of a daughter, begging for the life of a father/ decided ta let him live turned and shot her"
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    yea i admit its not that gude.well tha first and 3rd guy was MIMS and im tha second.its my first track so i ahve to get used to evrything.and tha beats pretty fast so i culde'nt keep up but ima keep my head up and keep postin some more

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    thats what i like to read papi u stay focused and u keep comin back u dont make excuses what was wrong u jus come back and try again thats whats up pa keep postin

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    Default Re: My first official track

    i love this beat mims murders it

    your verse -

    u dont know know where a bar starts n ends do u?

    sounds like u tryin to do a double time flow but u aint pullin it off, those pauses cannot stay, quality is cracked, delivery and voice both need work

    i'd go into more detail but i guess it's aight for your first ever drop
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    if its ur first song then its not bad but theres obviously need for improvement

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    Default Re: My first official track

    It was already said, but study bar patterns and work on constructing bars, where they start and end, how you can lay them out to make it interesting but still be on flow.

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    pretty carzy the fisrt guy ripped it keep on workin on it u will ge better

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